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Artificial Reality
Publisher: Eric Johnson
by Kyle S. [Verified Purchaser]
Date Added: 03/08/2019 11:26:58

This story has the editor listed. I really hope he wasn't paid anything because this story is a mess of run on sentences, passive voice, and questionable too obviously wrong word choice. Here's just one sentence as an example:

Alas as the squad began roping down so far it was good, maybe a bit quiet but that could easily have been the noise the VTOL was making as he took a quick look to see if everybody was off, and they were as he slid down onto the hard roof and checked the indicators for his soldiers.

If reading like a first draft wasn't bad enough it bills itself as being 2060 but the technology is all stuff we have in the present of 2019. This was written six years ago. How pessimistic about/out of touch with technological developement does a person need to be to think that Augmented Reality HUDs are going to be the hot new thing in forty seven years? I'm sorry but unless you're a military fiction fan who likes sentences with too many clauses give this one a pass.



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