I'd have rated it a four, but somebody decided that it had to be released as a Zip file. It's not big enough to warrant that. Therefore, a rating of 3 is the best I can give it, I almost gave it a 2.

I like the premise of the magic pool. The problem I see, you actually lose casting ability at mid to higher levels, thereby reducing the strength of the wizard. The example given in the article shows our wizard restricted to 25 spell levels for the day. The book's method has him casting 41 spell levels. A major difference.

Can not open any part of this. I have no idea what this is. To me, it is a complete waste of time.

It's not that I didn't like it, it's that it has no place in the game. It's actually rather a dumb idea.

Interesting from the start, and only got better. Superb reading.

I had my doubts when I first started this, but before I knew it, I was at the end.

Perhaps the idea of men as sex slaves compelled me on, perhaps it was that it was just different. Either way, the only thing left when I finished, was a longing for more.

Our hero was there for how long, that wasn't mentioned. One question I thought about, was did he perform to complete expectations.

As for the axe wielding girl friend, I found her delightful in how she played her part.

I'd like to give this a five (as the story line was beautiful), but it was really short and a bit lacking in detail.

You mentioned that you had thought to add or change it. Personally, leave this alone. Write another, expanded version.